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tylerblue
10-15-2008, 08:25 PM
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mario22
10-15-2008, 10:35 PM
Sounds good so far however I think you may have stopped part 1 too early I would've gotten the reader further into the story before you stopped making them want more. Thats just my personal take...so far looks good.
Adam
10-16-2008, 02:31 PM
Very nice opening. I look forward to reading more. :)