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crydun
01-21-2003, 10:12 AM
here is my latest. Dedicated to EddieWarp. Thanks for your friendship and the wealth of knowledge you have given me. I will treasure it always!!

Love, crydun

The rain was falling softly as Eddie Warp walked home. Birds were buzzing in and out of the trees as if trying to dodge the raindrops. As he walked further, he could see Mrs. Crowley’s rose garden blooming. It will be good for the roses, I guess, he thought to himself as he passed them. He had to get home quickly. Jen would be calling him any minute. She was so beautiful with her long, blonde mane laying gently on her shoulders. He started walking faster as he neared his house. He turned the key in the door and opened it. He heard a bark and held out his arms as Reuben, his black Labrador, leaped at him from the living room. Laughing, he removed his hat and placed it on a peg near the door. He threw his briefcase in the corner of the hallway where it would be waiting for him the next morning.
Just then, the phone rang. “That should be Jen,” he called gaily to Reuben as he briskly walked to pick up the phone.
“Hello,” he said jovially into the receiver.
“You’re home already,” her familiar, silky voice replied.
“Yeah,” he said, smiling to himself. In his mind’s eye, he could see her sitting at her kitchen table, her legs crossed. She would be wearing her navy blue dress he loved so much. She was so sexy in it. She would probably be wearing black nylons and navy blue spike heels. He smiled as he thought of her sitting at the table absentmindedly slipping her foot in and out of her shoes, her long blonde mane cascading loosely down the back of the chair.
“So are we still on for tonight,” he inquired casually into the phone.
“Yeah,” she replied huskily.
He grinned broadly. Tonight was going to be fun for him. He couldn’t wait. They were going to dinner and a movie. After that, he had something special in store for Jen.
“Alright, I’ll see you at seven then.”
“Ok,” she said, her voice tinkling like crystal.
He hung up the phone and climbed the stairs with a spring in his step. He showered quickly and changed his clothes. He chose an off-white dress shirt, brown suede dress pants and a matching brown vest. He whistled as he went about the room, checking that all was in order. He dashed out quickly and ran downstairs. He had to hurry. Jen would be waiting. He didn’t want to keep her waiting. He grabbed his hat and rushed out the door.
Jen stood at the door, smiling as she watched him walk up the sidewalk. He was so sexy, like something out of a movie. He had broad shoulders, a chiseled jaw and light brown hair that he always protected with a Fedor hat. He was smiling as she opened the door.
“Hey doll! Whatcha doing” he teased playfully.
“Looking at you,” she said, giggling.
He grinned broadly then, fixated. The sound of a woman’s laughter made him feel warm inside. It stirred something deep inside him and rocked the very core of his being.
Later, as they sat in the restaurant, Jen felt something lightly brush her foot. She tried to focus on the conversation.
“So anyway, the boss says I might get more hours,” he was saying.
“That’s good,” she said, still trying not to laugh.
Eddie sat across the table, watching as she twisted and flinched, fighting the laughter that was inside her. Come on, laugh, he thought to himself, impatiently. He knew she hated to lose her composure in public. Her face was growing redder by the minute.
“What’s wrong,” he asked innocently.
“Oh nothing,” she denied.
“Come on. Something’s up. Tell me,” he said, twisting the feather deeper into her foot.
He allowed it to weave in and out of her toes, her weakest spot. Unable to hold it in any longer, she erupted into a volcano of laughter. She sat in the restaurant, her body shaking as she giggled hysterically.
“What’s wrong, doll?” Eddie feigned.
“Something has been tickling my foot. I can’t stand it!!!”
“Oh really,” he said, perking.
She crawled under the table and saw the big, fluffy feather in his hand. She gasped in mock horror. “It was you!!!”
Eddie was laughing now. “yeah. I couldn’t resist. And later, I’ll kiss those lovely toes and take all the tickle away.”
Later, in his apartment, he did just that. Occasionally, an explosion of giggles would erupt from Jen. Then, all would be silent again.
“Oh Eddie, you are so sexy. Like Bogey or something, she moaned, tracing circles on his tummy. He giggled lightly and whispered “Here’s looking at you, kid!” as he turned out the lights.

;) ;)

ticklebear2
01-21-2003, 11:29 AM
Crydun: You surely know how to write the stories. You have and excellent way about the detail. Keep up the good work. You had me in tears from laughing so much.

Ticklishly Admired
Ticklebear2

:bump: :idunno: :bouncybou

crydun
01-21-2003, 12:58 PM
awwww,

thanks friend, for your kind words. I'm very touched.

ticklishly yours,

crydun:D :p

ticklebunny 2
01-21-2003, 01:22 PM
WOW!!! :) I am very impressed! This story is absolutely amazing!! ;) You definitely have a divine gift for description, you are truly a scenery master. I loved this story! MORE MORE MORE!!!!! Ticklebunny is dying to hear more, anticipation is killing me!!!!!! I want to hear what adventure is next for these two characters. I liked the dialogue too, it was very catchy and very amusing and sexy. Excellent
job :);):D :bunny:

ticklishly amused

Ming
01-21-2003, 01:48 PM
Impressive, crydun. Most impressive. Your writing style is awesome .... looking forward to part 2 :)

crydun
01-21-2003, 03:44 PM
thanks!!!

I'm glad you liked. I hope my English 265 class feels the same on Thursday. My group liked Kindred Souls. thanks again for your replies. that keeps the story where everyone can see it.


ticklishly yours,

crydun

tieler
01-21-2003, 11:00 PM
A good story, very descriptive, except when it came time for the money shot, so to speak. There was no buildup to the actual tickling. No setup or description of the scene. All of a sudden we are at the restaurant and he is tickling her foot with a feather underneath the table. Earlier in the story you mentioned that she would slip her shoes on and off during the date, so I guess we are supposed to assume her shoes are off. ANd does this guy have gorilla arms or what? Since he is tickling her feet under the table and she doesn't seem to know it is him his arms must be very long. I only bring this up because the rest of the story is so well written and this part comes up short. A little more descrition in this area and this story could be be great not just good.

crydun
01-22-2003, 09:04 AM
no, he doesn't have gorilla arms! LOL He has a long feather that he's using under the table. thanks again for your posts!!!

ticklishly yours,

crydun

crydun
11-04-2009, 02:09 PM
bump, bump. For a whole new generation of fans to enjoy. Feedback is welcome and encouraged on all my stories...