this is still January, and we've already got the Golden Feather Award winner for Fiction Story
So lets get this stright ... your story is just wipe the floor of most story in the story section. in fact, the reader get all of it! climax, description, amazing plot, perfect details, and its just masterpiece. really really state of art! which is great! this one is sharper than any other story in this section!
this is trully trully trully brilliant story! every word, every line, every paragraph are perfect, and as a reader you need to read one by one to reach its climax. i remember my fav writer three years ago, he had a great writing skill just like you. he won the golden feather award, and i hope you'll get that one.
its a wonderful story! awesome!