Ron's ultimate payback to hermione!

hope you dudes like my story, and yeh im knew and a great fan of all the stories, shouldve started more earlier, oh well enjoy! and by the way this is set on the last year of Hogwarts, there eigth year. Feel free to reply i like to know what you think




It was raining everywhere up in merry old England, and Hogwarts was no exception. The rain hit the once crystal clear window of the Gryffindor common room where Hermione sat reading one of the library’s books.

Upstairs on the bunk beds were Harry and Ron, Harry was listening to Ron’s intent plans to get back at Hermione who insulted him about his very low-test results. They where thinking of the perfect spell or charm to hit Hermione with, a non-painful one of course. Then Ron remembered the exact spell Harry had used on Malfoy when they had duelled, the “Rictusempra charm”. Harry looked at Ron and said “But do you think she’s ticklish.”
“I definitely hope so.” Said Ron “Well there’s only one way to find out.” Said Ron as he instructed Harry to go down stairs and have a test.

So Harry began to slowly creep down the Gryffindor stairwell in his invisibility cloak given to him from his father and past through Dumbeldore. The fire in the common room was amazing, warmth flowing out of it like blood from an open wound and light radiated around the room eliciting shadows every which way. Hermione was still engrossed in her book that she didn’t even hear Harry bump into the small corner table next to the stairs.
“Rgh” Harry let out under his breath after realising the table had jabbed in the crutch. Ron was watching the whole thing from upstairs and stifled a giggle. Harry had recovered from his pains and slyly crept on. He walked right in front of Hermione and let out a little whistle. Immediately she looked up, she gazed ahead for several seconds then turned her head. As the way Hermione was she had to know where it came from so she inserted her bookmark and memorised what line she was up to and slowly placed the book on the flat of the arm rest. That was Harry’s chance, the book was out of the way and had a clear shot at her ribs, so he dived in for the kill.

Harry grabbed Hermione by the sides and began to dig into them.
Hermione couldn’t have been more ticklish.

HAHAHHAHAHHEHEHEEHAHHAHAAHAHAHAWAHAHAW-WHOAHAHAHA’S THAHAHEHEHAHHERE!” Hermione said through fits of laughs and giggles. She began to swipe out in front of her and caught onto something. She yanked at it with all her might and Harry’s cloak came off, she saw this but couldn’t do anything against the tickling Harry was inflicting on her torso.
AHAHAHHAHAHHAHAH AHHAAHHARRY HAHAHA HAH AHA HA!!!” Harry stopped and backed away allowing her to catch her breath and when she finally did she stood up and Harry backed away. As she walked into Ron’s bird eye view, Ron stood up drew his wand and shouted

“RICTUSEMPRA!!!” immediately both the silver arch’s exploded out of the wand and Hermione turned. She turned only to find a direct hit to the stomach by the charm. Hermione hit the ground, hard.

“Bullseye!” Ron and Harry shouted in unison. Hermione rolled onto her back with a nasty glare on her face, this glare soon dissolved into a smile. She had no clue what had happened she was furious but she couldn’t stop trying to laugh. Even through her silky grey nightie she felt fingers slowly gliding out her smooth delicate porcelain coloured tummy. She was trying her best to fight it.

“mmph..,he he he, mph, hhmmmmmmm he heehe.” She may have been able to hold on a little longer if it not for the charm worsening. She could now feel as if a fluffy quill was fluffing into her small delicate naval. This was truly the feather that broke the camel’s back.

“AHAHAHHAHAHAHA HAHAH ANOAHAHAHNONONOAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAAAAAAAAAAAHAHAHAHHA HEHEHEHEHAHAHHAEHAHEHAHAHHAHA AHAHAHHEWWWAAAHAAIITTAAHAHAHHA.” Ron had just come down from the staircase he found himself giggling at the sight, even Harry was laughing.
“When do you think we should call it off?” Said Harry.
“Well, when she doesn’t like it any more.” Said Ron, Hermione now laughing even harder as she felt another quill tracing around her small pert breasts.
“PLLEAEAAAHAHAHAHAHAH AHAHHA PLAHAHHA PLEEEEAHAHAHHA PLEASE AHAHAHAHAH STOP ITTTTAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAEHEH HEHE NEEHEHE EHEHEHE EHEHE!” Hermione giggling and laughing at the same time from the different punishments.

“how can you tell she likes it now.” Asked harry
“Well look, she’s not flailing around that much she’s actually trying to stay with it.” Ron said happily.

After awhile they knew she couldn’t take any more Ron disarmed the charm. When Hermione had stop the remaining giggle effects and caught her breath both she and Ron apologised to eachother. But Ron really could not wait to try the spell on her again. Which he did, and she got him too. The two of them actually made it a routine to make sport of this charm.

..."teasing her small pert breasts"?

...ok, folks. I LOOOVE tickling as much as the next guy. Not too keen on the sexual depictions, but if that's your thing, that's your thing. I don't even mind tickling of minors as long as it's totally innocent and 100% non-sexual. But i absolutelt cannot STAND it when someone takes an existed title that has a certain age-ranged audience, wheter it be a cartoon, book series, or film, and makes a tickling story with SEXUAL themes. I find it an insult to the copywrite holder, and i see it as a foul mockery of their work. To me, if someone is going to do a tickle story of a copywrited title, it should fit the standards of said title. For instance, in a real Harry Potter book, you would NEVER see J.K. Rowling describing "small pert breasts". Keep that for your own PERSONALIZED stories.

Well, in all fairness, he did set it in the "eight (actually eigth) year of Hogwarts" (which granted doesn't exist since the school only has seven years) to ensure that all characters involved were eighteen or above. Not exactly my cup of tea/coffee/caffinated-soft-drink, but not against the rules, I don't think.

i loved this story and i hope you write another one don't worry what people say you broke no rules and this forum is all about different peoples different views don't be afraid to write whatever you want as long as it fits the rules.

granted, he broke no rules. It's just that, personally, i find it an insult when someone takes copywrited material and puts a sexual spin on it. Imagine if you were J.K. Rowling. How would u feel if u found out that something you've been working on for about 15 years was being taken by fans and turned into something of a sexual nature. Personally, i'd be outright insulted.

dude, wouldn't George Lucas feel the same way in theory about the picture and linked site in your signature?

The Harry Potter books have already inspired hundreds of fanfiction sites, and a lot of them contain sexually oriented stories. I'm guessing she either doesn't care, or can't do anything about it, otherwise I'd think these fan sites would be shut down for legal/copywright reasons. As long as the authors aren't trying to profit from stories based on her characters, and as long as the stories aren't meant as pornographic material centered around minors, I don't really think there's anything that bad about it.

1st off, my picture, as well as my forum, features nothing sexual. Just clean tickling. Point out ONE sexual item in my picture, i dare you.

2nd, i'm offended by sexual fanfiction as well. I'm sure if J.K. Rowling and other writers were aware of just what people were doing with their characters, they'd be outraged. But what can they do, sue everyone on the internet? My point is, too many people, especially people on the TMF, see tickling as a sexual activity. Granted, it can be used as a sexual activity, but that doesn't mean it needs to be LIMITED to it. By that logic, anyone who innocently tickles a small child is automatically molesting them. BZZZ! wrong! Tickling should be fun, not soley sexual. And Harry Potter is a series for ALL ages, not horny adults. That being said, it's my personal opinion (and i'm not a mod, so i can't make this a rule) that if someone is going to write a tickle story on a copywrited material, that it should fit the original context, whether it be playful tickling or cartoonish tickle-torture. For example, J.K. Rowling would NEVER write about "small ample breats". Therefor, a Harry Potter tickle fiction shouldn't include that either. If you're going to include stuff like that, write something on...*thinks and shrugs* Aeon Flux or something, or your own original work. But don't go insulting other people's work with it.

EmSeeSquared said:

1st off, my picture, as well as my forum, features nothing sexual. Just clean tickling. Point out ONE sexual item in my picture, i dare you.

2nd, i'm offended by sexual fanfiction as well. I'm sure if J.K. Rowling and other writers were aware of just what people were doing with their characters, they'd be outraged. But what can they do, sue everyone on the internet? My point is, too many people, especially people on the TMF, see tickling as a sexual activity. Granted, it can be used as a sexual activity, but that doesn't mean it needs to be LIMITED to it. By that logic, anyone who innocently tickles a small child is automatically molesting them. BZZZ! wrong! Tickling should be fun, not soley sexual. And Harry Potter is a series for ALL ages, not horny adults. That being said, it's my personal opinion (and i'm not a mod, so i can't make this a rule) that if someone is going to write a tickle story on a copywrited material, that it should fit the original context, whether it be playful tickling or cartoonish tickle-torture. For example, J.K. Rowling would NEVER write about "small ample breats". Therefor, a Harry Potter tickle fiction shouldn't include that either. If you're going to include stuff like that, write something on...*thinks and shrugs* Aeon Flux or something, or your own original work. But don't go insulting other people's work with it.

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i have to agree with you on this, even though i am not familiar with those stories or harry potter either. but yes they would be outraged i believe. it would be like me taking the wizard of oz, write dorothy as a tickle victim, with the munchkins tickling her to an orgasm. an utter outrage.

personallly i like stories with original themes and ideas. and btw EmSeeSquared i like your siggy

isabeau

I don't know..one sexual item? All of them are chained up in what appears to be some kind of tickle-torture room, is that innocent?
Have you ever known bondage/tickling stories to be "innocent"? This is a sexually oriented website, it's no secret or shame that people here enjoy tickling in a more-than-friendly way.

I don't know, maybe J.K. Rowling would hate the fanfiction. Most of it isn't meant with disrespect, it's just fantasizing on paper. I wrote one too, it's on this page. I explained in my post why I wanted to do a Harry Potter-based story. And there are some sexually suggestive things in my story, though no lavish descriptions of breasts. If you'd like, read it and give me some feedback, I think it remains respectful to the material, while being far enough outside of it to not be offensive. But if it is, let me know what is offensive about it, I'm honestly interested in what people think of my writing. To heckler, I think you should work on your spelling/grammar, but keep writing if it is something you enjoy, not everyone will always like your work, but don't let it discourage you.

I don't know..one sexual item? All of them are chained up in what appears to be some kind of tickle-torture room, is that innocent?

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oh? what do you call the dungeon tickle scenes in Gummi Bears or Digimon? those were kiddy shows! That's exactly what i'm talking about. If someone's gonna do a tickle story on an existing title, they should be like THOSE scenes. Simple, clean, no privates-tickling, no orgasm tickling, but something harmless or, in the case of cartoons, obsurdly torturous, but not to the point of "PLEASE GOD! I CAN'T STAND ANYMORE! I'LL DO WHATEVER YOU WANT!! STOP!!!".

I got no qualms about fan fiction IN GENERAL either. everyone has a right to write STORIES of their favorite characters. i just want it clear that it don't like stuff of sexual nature, Limes and Lemons, that sort of thing. I find them insulting.

and thanx, Isabeau. at least SOMEONE agrees with me.

Then let's let that be the last word on this issue from everyone. Emseesquared has expressed his opinion, others have agreed or disagreed with it. Neither side will likely change their opinions based on anything else written in this thread, so let's agree to disagree and drop further discussion on this matter.

http://www.ticklingforum.com/showthread.php?t=28677

We (that is to say I (Anna) since Heather had yet another accident on the road. But I love my wife nonetheless!) are not returning just adding our opinion.
Love,
Anna and Heather Smith

Heather & Anna said:

http://www.ticklingforum.com/showthread.php?t=28677

We (that is to say I (Anna) since Heather had yet another accident on the road. But I love my wife nonetheless!) are not returning just adding our opinion.
Love,
Anna and Heather Smith

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eeks is she ok? and nice to see you back. i've read some of your posts on the story forum. wondered where you were. nice to meet you.

and i agree nothing anyone will say will change anyone elses opinion

isabeau

apologies

i am very sorry if i have offended any of you, i know that this was contraversial, again sorry... i do understand that i was not true to how j. rowlings depictions in the book were stretched and made peverse, if i intend to write another fic i will seriously consider how to best change the way that in which they are tickled. I am again very sorry...though that was my first peice, and i am now encouraged to change my style...and i have read the harry potter books (save the half blood prince) and i too know that was sinister as what i did! apologies!...oh and the reason i thought the part about the breasts was acceptible is that there are several harry potter fics and some have tickling of that region

Heather my beautiful bride had an accident. She twisted her ankle (twice in one day!) when running on footpath and uneven surface caused her to fall. Lucky she had her mobile. Anyway, she's okay now, just on crutches. (It's so horrible to see her that way!). I drove her to the hospital and they said she has ligament damage. She is so brave. Anyway, she's resting on the couch as she refused to sleep on the bed as it's only midnight Sunday! And thank you for being so nice. I was very worried about her, but she can be very sotic about her injuries. Anyway, we are glad you liked it, we probably will not be posting on the Forum any stories but we are gladly you liked them! Welcome again to the Forum, isabeau!
Love,
Anna and my babe Heather

i pray she heals well

heckle said:

i am very sorry if i have offended any of you, i know that this was contraversial, again sorry... i do understand that i was not true to how j. rowlings depictions in the book were stretched and made peverse, if i intend to write another fic i will seriously consider how to best change the way that in which they are tickled. I am again very sorry...though that was my first peice, and i am now encouraged to change my style...and i have read the harry potter books (save the half blood prince) and i too know that was sinister as what i did! apologies!...oh and the reason i thought the part about the breasts was acceptible is that there are several harry potter fics and some have tickling of that region

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heckle that was very nice of you to apologize. however you should be allowed to write how you feel. as i've said in the past i am not familiar with the harry potter series or the other ones, but i did find it inappropriate to incorporate sexual undertones in a childrens story. otherwise hon your style of writing is terrific. keep it up

isabeau

and remember these are friendly criticisms at least from me lol

thankyou, it helps to know when ur in error and that there are people to help you out...and i do recommend the harry potter series, though the first book is rather slow till half way but meh, its all good!

Food for thought.

EmSee, I have noticed your opinion on fanfic so to speak on two threads now, and I must say, I agree and disagree strongly both ways Seriously, don't take it as a argument kinnda post, just that your concept made me think more than most discussion in the story section and I like that.

Fanfic is an interesting phenomenon. It offers an nice outlet for an author, it allows us to flesh out our fantasies and flex our witting muscles without having to create a new world and new characters. On the other hand it is someone else's sovereign intellectual property so to speak and more importantly their own artistic work. I have tried fanfic in the past and I have always debated the genre.

On the one hand, I agree fully with the concept of staying true to the author's intentions, for the most part, on most tickling, or fetish, or even many dedicated fanfic sites that becomes more and more blurry. There are some authors who have done it here with such seamless brilliance that it seemed like an episode from the show or chapter from the book... (Joey's Awakening springs to mind) and I will agree that is the "best of both worlds" so to speak. On the other hand there is another element of fanfic that already starts to violently bend the authors intent, the element of "what if" If you look at Buffy fanfic from the latter seasons you see alot of pairing between Buffy and Willow, and Willow and Giles... obviously both matches cross the authors intended sexual preferences for one character or the other... but if we are going to allow for fan fic in general don't we have to allow some leeway for the author to explore.

I think most mainstream authors would despise all but the best fanfic, and even much of that. Because it's like taking someone's baby and dressing it up like YOU want, teaching it to say what YOU want it to say and in essence for a few pages making it your own.

I understand what your saying and I really do respect it, but the idea of keeping sexuality out of fanfic (at least in certain cases) seems odd to me, not because sexuality is something I feel the need for in stories (I actually often think it detracts from a good story) but because IF you allow for fanfic in the first place this seems almost like saying... well we will allow fanfic, but only GOOD fanfic, if its not really good, you can't write it. Because the best fanfic does exactly what you say, it seems to seamlessly emerge from the story. So two of my most fundamental artistic beliefs are pitted against each other in this question, one is the respect for another artists work... the second is the freedom of an artists work. Quite an interesting conundrum indeed.

What I think the crux for me actually is this... I agree with you, I personally am not opposed one two jump on the wagon of insane minor paranoia (see "Eighteen and one Minute" for my feelings on that) but since it is one of the few HARD AND FAST rules on the forum, there is an element used here that I have questioned since I first saw it employed. The under 18 time warp to skid around the rule. I saw this best employed by a well known author on the forum with two celebs, (who I believe are now both 18+) and he made an amazing story with only slight sexual implications of the two starlets, using the time warp effect. I can't write about a 16 year old hottie without getting flamed and the mods erasing it.... so Ill set my story three years latter.... BRILLIANT! Its an interesting side step of the rules, after my own heart, but I wonder about it. So as you can see, I am not really drawing a great many conclusions here.... just thinking out loud because I find it an interesting topic. I will stop ranting now. Everyone keep writing... and keep talking, and keep thinking. (No matter what anyone says, thinking is a good thing)

With all love and respect, MasterTT

Master TT: as i meantioned before, i'm not against fan fiction in GENRAL. i just can't stand it when writers make them perverse Lime and Lemon stories. For example, i'm a huge fan of anime. Now, who here is familiar with Yu-Gi-Oh? well, i cannot STAND it whenever i see a fan fiction (and there are a LOT of them) that depicts Yugi and his "Yami Yugi" alter ego having sexual relations with each other. It absolutley INFURIATES me. And your thing you said about "time warps"? Well, one of the major rules that makes me mad at the TMF is the rule about minors. Now, i know it's some sort of dumb legal thing, but, as i said before, tickling shouldn't be limited as soley a sexual practice, because it's not. It can be used as one, but it's not SOLEY one. If it were up to me, which it's not, the TMF would be about tickling in GENERAL, not so much in the sexual department, which it seems to be. For instance, if something contained tickling a minor, with NO sexual references, TOTALLY clean, then it would perfectly be acceptable. But then, like i said, it's not up to me.

Heckle: i appreciate the appology, i really do. thanks. i just wish other tickling writers would just get the message.

believe me i got the message lol. And i appreciate the need for authenticity and how people go about stories the wrong way. again i apologise thank you for your replies and it is time i start a different sort of genre in my writing.

Seeing as Heather is asleep, (it's 1:26 a.m), I (anna) will make this brief.
Thanks isabeau and heckle for your kind words, I (Anna) can tell you that Heather has minor ligament damage and she will spend a maximum of 3 weeks!! Minimum of one week. So it's liekly my poor angel will be wounded at Christmas!!!! Well I (Anna) am going to leave and download some pics now and bemoan the fact that Kazaa is unavailable here in the land of Oz!
Love,
Anna and Heather
P.s Heatehr appreciates your concern!

Heather & Anna said:

Seeing as Heather is asleep, (it's 1:26 a.m), I (anna) will make this brief.
Thanks isabeau and heckle for your kind words, I (Anna) can tell you that Heather has minor ligament damage and she will spend a maximum of 3 weeks!! Minimum of one week. So it's liekly my poor angel will be wounded at Christmas!!!! Well I (Anna) am going to leave and download some pics now and bemoan the fact that Kazaa is unavailable here in the land of Oz!
Love,
Anna and Heather
P.s Heatehr appreciates your concern!

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well now thats a shame Anna hope Heather gets well fast.

isabeau

hey heckle, that was nice of you to listen to the criticism and give an apology for any offensiveness. It is a complicated subject like Master TT says, hard to say what material could be called respectful to the original work and what could be considered disrespectful...I guess it all depends on how each reader sees the author's work personally, if you really love a certain book or a movie then it can be hard to enjoy a story based from it, if you feel like it isn't true to the material in some way. To me sexuality is one of the trickiest things in this case, some people don't want to see it associated at all, some do see sexual themes within the stories/characters and explore them further, hard to say at what point it goes from artistic expression to something pornographic. I guess everyone has their comfort level, some would say pornography is a form of artistic expression itself, some would strongly disagree, and then there's all the varying shades of gray with artists that use shocking or provacative images/words to make a statement.

When I was writing the HP fanfic story I did for here I was thinking about how Harry Potter is kind of similar to Star Wars, a big coming-of-age epic, the ultimate battle between good and evil, similarities of the way the characters use focus and concentration for magic and the Jedi do the same with the "force" powers. It is kind of easy to see Harry Potter as a children's story since it takes place mostly in a school, and it is totally appropriate for kids of course, but I think it really goes beyond that like Star Wars does...Star Wars is something a lot of kids loved back when the old ones came out and now, but the story was good enough that it was enjoyable for adults too, I feel the same about the Harry Potter books. Me and my boyfriend are both Star Wars & Harry Potter geeks

The story I wrote was kind of a sexy tickling romantic fantasy and it was sort of based on the theme in a lot of fantasy literature going back for a long time, the powerful, fearsome male and the beautiful, innocent maiden... from King Kong to Beauty & the Beast to Anakin Skywalker, they all had one thing in common, they were incredibly powerful males that fell apart over a pretty girl. To me this sort of theme is strongly linked to sensuality and sexuality, it's an expression of the power romantic love/sexual desire has to make men and women vulnerable.

Anyway, interesting topic that came about because of this story, and I'm enjoying reading all the stories and ideas from all the creative people here

...holy crap...man that actually made a hell of alot of sense, no joke and i truly apreciate what everyone has to say, thankyou for sharing your oppinions about my piece and i stll ask for apologies. thankyou!