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AnnieHall
01-07-2006, 03:51 AM
Aloha. Well after doing some thinking I've finally come up with a second part to my first attempt at tickle-fiction. I have a feeling this is going to be a multiple part series of some sort. But anyway. It starts off exactly where I left off so if you haven't read part one yet...

http://www.ticklingforum.com/showthread.php?t=71711

Also, I still haven't thought of a title, so if any of you have some ideas/suggestions...

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“Mairead, we’ve been going out for quite some time, you know…” he said, picking up speed with his right index finger in my left armpit.

“And in that time you’ve been *quite* a mean girl…”

I was gasping and squirming and biting my lip, trying to keep as much composure as humanly possible. Part of me was having a blast, but part of me wanted to escape. Part of me was excited, and still another part was almost getting pissed off.

“I don’t know…” I trailed off. It wasn’t exactly easy to concentrate at this point.
“I don’t know what you’re talking about.”

But I did.

Jesus Christ, this is maddening.

“I think you do. I think you know exactly what I’m talking about,” he replied almost before I had gotten my sentence out.

He really is taking quite a liking to this little fetish of mine. Almost *too* much of a liking.

“You take every chance you get to be a smart-ass. Every chance to say something sarcastic…”

He still had my wrists in one of his hands, but he stopped the tickling. I felt him shift his weight in the dark and shuffle around somewhere below the bed.

He stopped? What the heck…

He went back to straddling me and I heard a noise like metal clinking against metal.

My eyes were open as wide as I thought I could make them, pupils dilated as big as saucers, but all I saw was black. A shadow here, something move. I was never sure. I could just barely make out the outline of his head and shoulders hovering over me. My breathing was quick and heavy, not really out of exhaustion but more of a nervous excitement.

He leaned forward and put both of his hands around my wrists. He was fiddling with something around the bars at the head of the bed. Something cold and hard rubbed against my hands and I felt and heard a click.

He brushed past my ear and whispered…

“You think you’re so funny.”

He’s not wrong. I do think I’m hilarious. Maybe more than others do, but I crack myself up.

It was too soon to show weakness yet, so I replied smugly, “Don’t deny it. I’m frick’n hilarious.”

He sat up while he brought both of his hands down from my wrist to the inside of my elbow and finally to as close to my underarms as he could without actually touching them.

I pulled my arms. They didn’t come down.

What the hell? Handcuffs? Are you serious…

It never occurred to me that he would have, let alone use, any form of bondage, however heavy or light, but I did kind of ask for this.

“I would say this is no laughing matter, but that won’t be true for you much longer.”

I wish he could see me rolling my eyes. What a dumb line.

“You have such a dominant personality. All your comments and jokes. You always have something to say. You’re too quick-witted for your own good if you ask me…”

He was massaging the insides of my triceps, which to my surprise tickled quite a bit. I bit my lip until I tasted blood. No way was I going to let him win just yet.

“You know, not everyone is as smart as you. Not everyone can come up with the shit you say. And I think it’s pretty funny, this little interest of yours. I mean, it makes sense. You’re just waiting and hoping one day someone will have had enough of your talk. That they’ll just snap and leave you a limp, giggling mess like I plan to do.”

He sighed, and then let out a small chuckle.

“Mairead, do you even know what you’re in for?”

Something about the way he said that made a tiny pang of fear explode in my chest. He was so confident, almost with a hint of pity in his voice. As if to say “poor girl. Poor, stupid girl.”

I was scared. Yes. Me. Downright frightened. I mean, here I was, practically immobile, every movement futile. I could just barely bend my elbows, slightly. I was lying there. Laid out perfectly. Flesh covered in goose bumps just waiting, almost preparing itself for the attack that lingered somewhere in the near future. Maybe I didn’t know what I was in for.

He stopped the cruel massage at my triceps and brushed the hair out of my face and away from my neck. I tensed up when his fingers brushed the side of it. He must have felt it too because he said, “Don’t worry, we’ll save that spot for later.”

He was doing it all wrong. This wasn’t how it was supposed to be. This was supposed to be fun. But it was. Not frustrating. It was that too. I’m not supposed to have to listen to his make-believe scolding about what a smart ass I’ve been. He’s not supposed to enjoy it this much.

He stood up and got off the bed. He left the room and put the dogs out. Came back and locked the bedroom door.

The shadow of him looked like a giant hovering over me. He got back into his old position, straddling my hips.

He pulled my shirt up over my head. Now, I couldn’t even see his shadow, but I could just feel him smiling wickedly.

“I’ve turned off all the phones and the dogs are outside. No interruptions. Just you and me!”

At the very moment he said “me” his hands shot straight for my ribs. My arms were above and behind me, leaving every rib defined, vulnerable and open for attack. Inhaling was worse. I could feel my ribcage pushing harder against my skin, almost taunting him.

Each of his fingers instantly found a different hollow spot in between two ribs and he began rubbing the skin against the bone, slowly, then faster.

I arched my back, but his weight on top of me kept me from any real movement. I shook my head, gasping and whimpering. Laughter was dancing at the back of my throat.

ShitFuckShitFuckHolyJesusFuck

I exploded in a barrage of machine-gun-fire laughter, every “ha” seemed to ricochet off the walls. I inhaled with a squeal and exhaled in another shower of giggles.

The heels of my feet dug into the mattress as I tried to push him off of me, all to no avail.

He continued his assault on my ribs for a bit longer until I thought my cheek muscles might pop out of my face. I felt his fingers slow down and then stop altogether.

Oh my God. What is wrong with this guy? He’s crazy. Definitely, for sure. Wait, I think he’s done. Good.

“Oh, don’t get too relaxed. That was just the warm-up. I’ve got a few things in mind for you before I unlock those handcuffs.”

He got off of me again and I felt him pull each of my ankles through the bars at the end of the bed frame. He tied each one securely with some piece of cloth I couldn’t make out.

What is this guy? A professional boy scout? Jeez.

“Hope you’re…” he trailed a single finger down the length of each foot, “ready…”

heckle
01-07-2006, 09:10 AM
well well well...what to say...AWESOME!!! You make me wanna keep reading, got thats one gift youve got there! I like the challenges from one to the other and the attempt to break eachother, very well done!

milagros317
01-07-2006, 04:25 PM
Excellent story, anxiously awaiting part three. :D

AnnieHall
01-07-2006, 04:53 PM
Woo hoo!


People like me!

Dave2112
01-07-2006, 08:10 PM
It has been a long time since I enjoyed something this much...

Your perspective is sharp, and knowing you the way I do, I can imagine some of the looks on your face as you utter some of those lines and think those thoughts. This is very real and well-told. Again, it's good to see the clash of projected personality vs. interior doubt the protagonist relates.

Beyond excellent, truly original. :triangle:

Hiryu
01-07-2006, 10:55 PM
:wow: Just :wow:

You are a rare one aren't you? I didn't believe that a woman of your caliber could exist. I'm actually begining to feel jealous toward the guy in your story. You're making my blood boil. Please, don't stop!

AnnieHall
01-07-2006, 11:14 PM
:wow: Just :wow:

You are a rare one aren't you? I didn't believe that a woman of your caliber could exist. I'm actually begining to feel jealous toward the guy in your story. You're making my blood boil. Please, don't stop!


lol I didn't think it was *that* great, but yeah. Part III to come whenever I feel like it. Probably someday soon when I'm bored or can't sleep.


Thanks :)

Mostly Harmless
01-08-2006, 06:48 AM
I just ought to express my admiration. You're definitely a new star in the TMF writers constellation =)

/impatiently awaits part III & all everything TG is about to post.../

heckle
01-08-2006, 06:56 AM
see i knew you shouldve written part II and now look, your moving to part three, AND people like you... hmm a job well done, your an excellent writer!

tommytikl
01-11-2006, 07:20 AM
Yeah, this is good writing because you let the readers mind imagine what is going on...but you describe with enought detail so the mind doesn't have to fill in all the gaps...

Good stuff...can't wait for me...

unit5610
01-13-2006, 12:50 PM
This is outstanding Mairead...great stories put the reader right in the action and this one does just that. So much fun...thank you for sharing you talent with us!

Sadistickler1
01-15-2006, 02:37 AM
"Taming The Smart Ass" ? I don't know. But I liked it. I can't wait till your part 3 is ready ! The FEET!!! MUAHAHAHA!!!! :woot: Good job. keep up the good work, cutie.
Sadistickler

Mimi
01-15-2006, 11:50 AM
Girl, you f'in rock!

So when are you getting published?

tickleboynyc
04-02-2006, 04:21 AM
HOT...

somehow i figured there was a submissive side to you...

very nicely done

Mastertank1
04-02-2006, 05:03 AM
Woo hoo!


People like me!

They do. I do too.

Very well written

Very expressive, nice shifts from thoughts to spoken words.

By all means, write more of this.

Mastertank1

We who play and dance are thought mad by they who hear no music.

AnnieHall
04-02-2006, 05:04 AM
They do. I do too.

Very well written

Very expressive, nice shifts from thoughts to spoken words.

By all means, write more of this.

Mastertank1

We who play and dance are thought mad by they who hear no music.


Maybe this summer, when I don't have to worry about classes and papers.

jreyn60
04-02-2006, 05:33 PM
Mairead, you already know I'm a fan. Thanks for a wonderful part II. You told me in the chatroom once that you didn't think tickling fiction was your bag, and I still respectfully and totally disagree! What a lucky guy you have.

Keep it up
Jreyn60

AnnieHall
04-02-2006, 05:49 PM
Mairead, you already know I'm a fan. Thanks for a wonderful part II. You told me in the chatroom once that you didn't think tickling fiction was your bag, and I still respectfully and totally disagree! What a lucky guy you have.

Keep it up
Jreyn60


What lucky guy? This story is fiction my friend.

And I might be good at writing this stuff, but it's not very fun.

jreyn60
04-02-2006, 05:56 PM
My bad. I thought for some reason your fiction was always based on some true story. Anyway, well done and I hope you enjoy writing it more some day, because I sure enjoy reading it!

jreyn60

Tamia78
04-02-2006, 06:05 PM
Hi, and I just wanted to say that I LOVED the story! Can't wait to read more!

--T

Red_Feather
11-14-2006, 09:54 AM
Oh wow, I've been away so long I never even knew there was a sequel! :bump:

Great writing, as always. I don't know who's luckier, the guy or the girl. :D