Since you wanted my thoughts, I gave this story a look. It’s pretty good, and decently lengthy. And the MF/M scene isn’t something a lot of people seem to wanna touch around here. I did not expect Brock to get in on the action like that.
Some pieces of criticism: Could use more paragraphing...
Blindfolded. It heightens the senses to not be able to see, and you can still hear the laughter, the gasps, and all that.
Would you rather be slowly tickled for an hour or intensely tickled for five minutes?