critics.
Jesus Christ is bad, but in my opinion you are the worst story writer at this forum.
i dont know the meaning of this story ?? you want to make love, get tickle or something or what ??
short, bad description, i dont know the purpose of this story, weak plot ... or i could say there is...
this is worst than before,
again:
- too short
- weak plot
- this story didnt have a purpose
- no soul in reading
- bad ass story
re-check the story again. you are the worst
critics. just critics
i don't know what this story mean ??
bad plot, not good at conversation, too short.
i think you have to re-check your story and change your syle, because it';s really worst.