This is not the way we behave here.
TickleScribe's not written and posted any stories in the years he's been here, but seems to feel it cool to discourage others who have actually taken the time and effort to try to.
Really now? This is not a position that I am a fan of.
I'm a writer, and the essence of being a writer is the desire to take a vision you have in your head, and communicate it to others through the medium of words. It's a skill. And like any skill it takes time, practice and energy to improve. I wrote a ton of things that are embarrassingly bad when I was learning. Some real stink bombs that were rife with not only poorly written sentences, bad plotting, and dialog that was so stiff you'd expect that it would bear the weight of the world should you have placed it on those words.
I got criticism from my peers. I got suggestions on how to improve. I was shown why what I did was not the best path. I was encouraged to re-write and compare the drafts so I could see why it was improved. And slowly I got better.
Every writer should have the chance to learn, and not be bullied out of creating by someone who has never even tried,
I am thrilled by the many people that were supportive and provided feedback at the top of this thread. They saw something they like in the work. And they took the time to share that.
I am NOT thrilled by the non constructive bulling though. That earned a ban from this section for that poster.
To the OP, I'd very much like to see you restore your story, and I hope you do.
No one asked you to write and post here. You did it because you were moved to, and I, and the forum values that. It's why we are here, and why this section of the forum exists. And we want you to feel welcome here.
To readers, its fine to not like a story someone wrote. But if you cannot be constructive and supportive to someone who put the time and effort into creating something for you to read for free then say nothing. I say "This one missed the mark for me, but thanks for trying."
Someone cared about the words you read enough to create them. Treat them with some respect.
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