critics.
Jesus Christ is bad, but in my opinion you are the worst story writer at this forum.
i dont know the meaning of this story ?? you want to make love, get tickle or something or what ??
short, bad description, i dont know the purpose of this story, weak plot ... or i could say there is...
critics. just critics
i don't know what this story mean ??
bad plot, not good at conversation, too short.
i think you have to re-check your story and change your syle, because it';s really worst.