The longest bondage story.

[cassandra1]

If you write bondage stories, what is the longest story you have written and what happened during the story that made it long without getting boring? By "longest", I don't mean having the most words or paragraphs, but taking place over the longest period from an in-character perspective. For example, in a bondage story that involves a kidnapping, the victim is held captive not just for a few hours, but for days or weeks with stuff happening in between.

I tried writing bondage stories but I always ran out of ideas for what happened to the main characters that would make the experience last days or weeks. If it only lasts an hour, it's not much of a story. But if each day is filled with torture or sex, it gets repetitive if I were to delay the ending a bit longer.

 

[Dr. Bill Kobb]

I've never written many bondage/tickling stories, but from a reader's perspective, I actually PREFER the shorter fictions.

I have a rather vivid and warped imagination, yet for some reason, I balk at stories where someone is put into a permanent state of servitude/slavery. Thus, I might go for a fictitious kidnapping story where the captive is toyed with by tickling while bound, just to pass the time while the ransom is delivered, but I don't care to read about it as an ongoing thing.

Just me, though. I think the majority may feel differently...

 

[blackmagicjack1]

Here's a thought Cassandra. Not only write about what is physically going on but was is mentally or emotionally going. Start off with victim all defiant and the just talk about the changes in the victim's way of thinking as they slowly surrender to their fate. Maybe even do the same thing for the torturer.

 

[HOLLYWOOD]

the hollywood brother loves to read stories. The third person or first person is good. The key is to capture what the victim or lee is feeling and the sense of no control. The hollywood brother thinks that you ought to go to the story section here and read a author by the name of Tower98. This is one of the hollywood brother favorite authors. He has written numeorus stories and most if not all will be classics someday. Also if you go to the TMF, read through the story archives by writer. the writer there known as TQLR is very good as well. Hopefully this may help you in your writing. The hollywood brother also thinks you ought to read Stephne King's book called "ON WRITING". it may help you as well

 

[cassandra1]

That's a good idea, though I don't write mental and emotional changes very well. One way I can think of to lengthen the story is for the captor and captive to have conversations, but it will be hard to express the gradual mental/emotional changes through dialogue. For example, what would the captor have to say to make the victim less defiant, more willing to chat? I don't think a straightforward "Let's be friends" approach would work.

 

[blackmagicjack1]

Silence. If all the captor is doing is tickling and tormenting the victim, without talking to them (or any verbal exchange) and then leaving them alone, the victim might be more than willing to talk if only to hurl insults. Also if the captor were to start talking to the victim at a moment of kindness ... say feeding time or a walk on a leash 🙂

 

[Betchass1]

My bet is on The Book of Genesis.
I think it'd be a good idea to imply a lot. Set up vivid physical settings, and let a lot of the emotions be implicit. If you describe people's internal emotions explicitly, no one feels it. If you describe their situations and their reactions, readers are free to imagine the emotions more naturally. It's kind of a dirty trick, but you can also change scene in the middle or leave things unresolved. Not that people reading bondage stories necessarily want an engrossing story anyway.

 

[cassandra1]

Hmmm... okay, good tips 🙂. It's hard to pick these up just by reading the existing stories on this site, since I'm more geared towards bondage than tickling when it comes to writing fiction. A tickling story can have all kinds of ticklish situations between the beginning and end, as many as the author can think of, whereas a bondage story would need to be more creative to avoid getting boring.

As we all know, tickling/bondage fiction can cover just about any kind of setting. Whether the victim is a girl/guy-next-door, a secret agent, a witch, a cop, etc, it seems like any kind of character can be used. I was wondering, what was the weirdest bondage story you read (you know, like something involving aliens, BDSM followers in hell, or the victim is a giant/giantess and the captors are normal humans) and what happened throughout the story to make it longer than a few paragraphs?

 

[Betchass1]

To keep from getting boring, you could simply have two things going on at once and go back and forth. Maybe someone's been kidnapped and is having some ordeal, and elsewhere someone is interrogating a conspirator to find out where. I dunno, just a thought.

 

[Betchass1]

That's a good idea, though I don't write mental and emotional changes very well. One way I can think of to lengthen the story is for the captor and captive to have conversations, but it will be hard to express the gradual mental/emotional changes through dialogue. For example, what would the captor have to say to make the victim less defiant, more willing to chat? I don't think a straightforward "Let's be friends" approach would work.

Show weakness?

 

[Betchass1]

That's a good idea, though I don't write mental and emotional changes very well. One way I can think of to lengthen the story is for the captor and captive to have conversations, but it will be hard to express the gradual mental/emotional changes through dialogue. For example, what would the captor have to say to make the victim less defiant, more willing to chat? I don't think a straightforward "Let's be friends" approach would work.

Now that I think of it, what about good-cop/bad-cop, only like good-dom/bad-dom?
A fantasy I used to have was of someone walking in, the 'lee shouting "HELP!" and the person saying "Oooh, I'll help!" like they were in on it. Heh.

 

[MistressValerie1]

To keep from getting boring, you could simply have two things going on at once and go back and forth. Maybe someone's been kidnapped and is having some ordeal, and elsewhere someone is interrogating a conspirator to find out where. I dunno, just a thought.

I like this idea a lot.

 

[blackmagicjack1]

It's a good idea, and there are several ways to play off of it. You could do flashbacks where the victim relives the ordeal of the events leading up to being captured. Or you could do a parallel flashback to a similar bondage situation, except they were lovingly teased by someone who cares about them. That way you have the interplay between soft and hard torture.

 

[Betchass1]

It's a good idea, and there are several ways to play off of it. You could do flashbacks where the victim relives the ordeal of the events leading up to being captured. Or you could do a parallel flashback to a similar bondage situation, except they were lovingly teased by someone who cares about them. That way you have the interplay between soft and hard torture.

I think reliving the events leading up to it is very good. I think that really would be going through someone's head: "Why did I trust that person?" "Why couldn't I have taken the bus instead of walking home?" or a personal favorite that I've hinted at in drawings, "Why didn't I listen when they warned me about this person?"
Then again, too realistic and it gets kind of creepy, knowing it really happens to people.

 

[cassandra1]

Okay, I read a few stories in the Story Section. One question for the guys: if a bondage story is longer because the writer frequently mentions or describes the female main character's appearance (like her outfit, her breasts, her hair, etc), would that make it a better story or too long winded? Not just at the beginning where you obviously expect a description, but at many points throughout the story, either from the narrator or one of the other characters.

 

[Dr. Bill Kobb]

Better to just hint at a general appearance at the start, and then perhaps delve into little details as the story progresses, I think.

Too often, a story will begin with, "Clyde stood back and admired his handywork with the rope-ties on Monica, who struggled in her size 8 black pumps and fishnet stockings with lavender garters leading up to sheer black thong panties, her size 44D breasts heaving as she panted behind the duct-tape covering her mouth, auburn hair covering her grey-green eyes...". 🙄

 

[cassandra1]

I thought the appearance of the female character is one of the things that grab a male reader's attention. If I just hint at her appearance at the beginning, will they stay interested enough to read on and get to the rest of the details?

 

[Dr. Bill Kobb]

My point is not to do it in such a cumbersome manner as many writers tend to do. That and, I can often pick up on that writer's exact fetish faves from the first sentence or two, just going by their description. Alittle subtlety goes a long way.

 

[Betchass1]

I thought the appearance of the female character is one of the things that grab a male reader's attention. If I just hint at her appearance at the beginning, will they stay interested enough to read on and get to the rest of the details?

I think so. I'm attracted to women with all kinds of physical appearances. I'll be turned on regardless of whether she's dark or light, chesty or slender, etc. It's nice to have an occasional unexpected detail, but I'm pretty good at imagining women without having them completely described.

 

[cassandra1]

An unexpected detail? Like what?

And on a similar note, is it possible to turn on a male reader if I leave the bondage till later in the story, and just tease them with possible scenarios, adding more detailed descriptions and/or developing the character's slutty personality? You know, like a heroine who is also a stripper, an excessively horny girl-next-door type, or a succubus who flirts with every male in her realm.

 

[Betchass1]

An unexpected detail? Like what?

And on a similar note, is it possible to turn on a male reader if I leave the bondage till later in the story, and just tease them with possible scenarios, adding more detailed descriptions and/or developing the character's slutty personality? You know, like a heroine who is also a stripper, an excessively horny girl-next-door type, or a succubus who flirts with every male in her realm.

An unexpected detail could be a description of one breast falling out from a thin pink bra as someone writhes; or of a tight belly that quivers involuntarily while a hand rests on it; or an elated-looking smile that forces its way out amid so much tension and struggle.
I think it's definitely feasible to tease, but best not to leave the bondage out completely until the end; maybe have short hints of it, but always changing scenes just when something seems ready to happen.

 

[cassandra1]

Okay, points taken. 🙂 I've been toying with the succubus idea recently (see my previous post), because it allows me to get creative with the world around her. I just realized that a story involving a stripper will be too similar to Stripperella, albeit with bondage, and girl-next-door stories are way too common.

If you are a typical male reader, would you prefer a tough main character who can free herself in the end, or a helpless damsel in distress who needs to be rescued? Or will either one be fine as long as the story includes your fetishes?

 

[Betchass1]

Okay, points taken. 🙂 I've been toying with the succubus idea recently (see my previous post), because it allows me to get creative with the world around her. I just realized that a story involving a stripper will be too similar to Stripperella, albeit with bondage, and girl-next-door stories are way too common.

If you are a typical male reader, would you prefer a tough main character who can free herself in the end, or a helpless damsel in distress who needs to be rescued? Or will either one be fine as long as the story includes your fetishes?

Succubus is hot. I have had similar inspirations, of a female spirit/creature that would entangle a woman in her magical hair and tickle her in the night. Maybe she would have been conjured by a woman who is a rival of the victim's for some man. The victim could be whisked away some night and her friends have to try to save her. I guess I like it because the victim would be utterly helpless, but the being would be under someone's control, so there is a chance for revenge... but that's my fantasy, not a request.

I am okay with either a tough or helpless character; both sets of reactions turn me on. Either way, I prefer a completely inescapable scenario, so I guess rescue is more in order, personally.

 

[Luckycat1]

Hi Cassandra!

Last year I completed two novels involving lesbian bondage: "The Merchant of Venom" and "Rosario's Revenge" The first was posted here as a vore stroy, but I was more interested in the bondage elements, and re-wrote it as a lengthy bondage story.
I think that when you write a story of any length and hopefully some depth, you need two things: a fresh and interesting story line, and definitive, rich characters. Like many writers, I fell in love with the characters in my novels.
Bondage action can become extremely tiring and pointless unless the characters are given depth and personality.
I strive to make the reader empathize with the characters and feel their desires, passions and love.
When I read an especially good story, I always become personally attacted to the players, and always hope that there will be a sequel.

Good luck, and keep writing.
ps. If you would like a .doc file of one of my novels, pm me.
A few of my short stories, (bondage-vore) can be found on my
personal site: www.unknown-zone.com

 

[cassandra1]

Wow, thanks for the link. It's pretty hard to come up with a story that's fresh, since so many ideas have already been done on this site alone. Is there a particular type of character, personality-wise, that hasn't been seen before?