Interesting... I love the part about "these ten fingernails were like several knives piercing my nerves and sending a flood of ticklish sensations throughout... ." The insight into Bolt Girls mind really adds depth.
As far as theme consistency goes, keep it to "tickling" rather than porn. Yes, I'm a male who would probably enjoy that at a primal level, but it would hurt my brain to see this story degenerate to such cheap antics to make the forum happy.