Chapter 1 of a bush..er, book I want to publish

[the_jimmy_james]

I love it as much as the other chapter you posted 🙂

Keep it coming! 🙂

 

[tk22]

maybe because i didn't read any of your previous stories, but i was so lost. o well

 

[Journia]

Not to worry. Wait, you were lost in this story?

 

[Tickle4444]

It's a great story! Poor Machiavelle is so ticklish! 🙂

 

[c_tickler]

Intresting story but am i the only one that finds it a bit dis-comforting that her father tickles her like that?
Apart from that i'd say great story - i'm unsure of the time of all this but cathedrals and it reminds me of medievil times with modern day clothing 🙂

 

[Aintboverd1]

There is nothing i can really add that everyone else hasn't said already. On the whole this is a fantastic start. I like the way it starts off with tickling from the beginning. I'm a little confused on the purple marks but this may have been something you have worked on in the past and I'm quite new to this site. I look forward to reading the next part 😀

Boverd

 

[Relent<]

its looking good so far, Ms. Journia. I'd pick this up if I saw it in a bookstore.😉