Whoa! Wait a minute. You were getting PMs from people saying your writing is no good? I remember this story. I liked it. I apologize for not commenting earlier, but this story and part 2 were really fun to read.
Not to brag, but I am one of the more accomplished writers on this forum. So follow my words and most of the others that commented on this story. This story was good! Your writing was fine. Don't let a few people make you doubt yourself. I have seen some poor stories in this forum before and yours was not bad at all! It was really entertaining and a really good storyline.
Keep this in mind. If a more popular writer (see the story archives on this forum) tells you that you suck, then be concerned. Others that have not written stories on this forum tell you that you suck, tell them to F off because what do they know? I don't see their stories getting accolades. Hell, did they even write a story? I am not happy you took your story down because some people gave you criticism. They have a right to say whatever, but it doesn't mean take it to heart. Look at the amount of comments you got on this story alone that were very positive. So I am hoping you put the story back for people to enjoy. You might be surprised at how many people really enjoy your work.