My New Story

[critterlord]

I did it! Despite my computer killing 90% of it and forcing me to
retype it😡 , I have done it. My new story, 51 pages double spaced.
My longest yet! I am so happy.😀 It has about 15 tickling scenes in
it. It is entitled The Furry Friend Part Three. It is about the
past of the myterious Veiled Woman, who is mentioned in almost all
of my stories. You'll learn of her past, and as a bonus, the fate
of Venus and Felicia, from the rest of The Furry Friend Saga. Make
sure you have read the first two, otherwise you'll just be
scratching your head too much to enjoy the story.
Please let me know how I am doing, and if you want me to continue
writing. Feedback is VERY important to me.

Well, see you in the funny papers.

 

[U.N.Owen]

Very, very nice, Critterlord. Your stories keep getting better and better. This one is very well thought-out, well-constructed and well-written. It has genuine charm, too.

I appreciate the little references to my stories, too.

(My only criticism is one I've mentioned before: you sometimes mix rather formal, old-style speech with very modern colloquial expressions. This isn't a particularly big deal, but I think the flow would be a little smoother if the dialogue were more consistent. But, like I said, a very minor point.)

Do you intend to continue this one? It has a lot of scope for expansion, given that the gals have to go through their initiation, and then unleash their tickling talents on the world. If you're seeking reader response on whether to continue the series, I'd vote yes. It has a lot of potential still left to be explored.

Glad you were able to retype it: it'd have been a real shame to lose it.

UNO

 

[Dark Convoy]

Owens right, Better and better. This is the best one yet, well written and very imaginative, definite 10 out of 10. As for weather u should keep going with it......HELL YA!!! absolutely u should.