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[tk5454]

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[stampstock]

Looks great! I didn't actually see the first one, but I like what you've done here.

 

[ticklishess]

The ticklers look pretty sadistic. I like the girl on the left. Her body type is right up my alley lol. Nicely done.

 

[Wally West]

Great work. Thanks for posting.

 

[Pietroskij]

Super!!!
If you can add a more desperate look on the girls it will be perfect

 

[hlkkln]

Ok but I think that the girl in the right (who is tickled) is tied but it is not seen the restraint which prevent her from standing... I think a rope which would fixe her tied hands above head would make it better... actually I say "why she lie down and not stand up to the sitting position" because if you are tickled you would trash and struggle by all means even if it would not help

 

[milagros317]

Great work!
Thanks for sharing it here. 😀

 

[tk5454]

LOOK I LEARNED HOW TO MULTIQUOTE!!!! Muahahahaa!!

Ok but I think that the girl in the right (who is tickled) is tied but it is not seen the restraint which prevent her from standing... I think a rope which would fixe her tied hands above head would make it better... actually I say "why she lie down and not stand up to the sitting position" because if you are tickled you would trash and struggle by all means even if it would not help

Yo! Actually, her arms and wrists are tied beneath the table and there's ropes pulling down between her ankles, but they are hard to see. Thanks for the feedback! I'll be sure to make that part more prominent next time. Actually, on my next one there should be no question how tied she is! *evil laugh*

Super!!!
If you can add a more desperate look on the girls it will be perfect

Yes! I can... I'm going to do some eyebrow work going forward, that should help!

Great work. Thanks for posting.

Cool, Thanks! And thank you for posting!

The ticklers look pretty sadistic. I like the girl on the left. Her body type is right up my alley lol. Nicely done.

Mine too 😉. And sadistic ticklers make the best ticklers. They really put their heart into it! Thanks!

Looks great! I didn't actually see the first one, but I like what you've done here.

Thanks, I'm glad you liked!

Great work!
Thanks for sharing it here. 😀

And thank you!

 

[ghirighiri26]

great work !!!

 

[Michaeljack]

Never saw the original but this looks great!

 

[MTJpub]

Great scenario and action! The discarded clothing and shoes is always a nice touch.


Jim
MTJpub.com

 

[seanwoj]

Good work.

 

[surfnskate]

Looks great to me. Well done!

 

[JFA]

Very very nice.

Thanks for sharing
R

 

[BritishSteel]

I haven't seen your original version, but this one is brilliant! 🙂

 

[tiger11]

nice work

 

[Tenebrae]

Really amazing improvements! I absolutely love the way the rope is pressing against the skin, making it "bulge" (for lack of a better word). It is actually very hard to make it look convincing without generating a "Michelin" effect, yet you did so masterfully! The victim's desperation looks absolutely pitch-perfect: I can almost hear her scream! And the two torturers are very cute; you seem to have put a lot of thought into their clothing and style, giving each her own identity while making them a good match. The victim's nipples are also perfect. Finally, I will join into Jim's praise for the way you drew the pile of clothes lying around. From my experience, it is actually quite hard to come up with a "random effect" while drawing, because artists never draw anything without a purpose. However in this case, you did it really well: they do look convincingly like they have been thrown around casually: another perfect score

I have really only one very minor criticism, and it is very subjective: I think once again that you need to polish the expressions. Firstly, the torturer whose eyes are visible still looks a bit like a doll rather than a human (that spark of life I mentioned before). I know it is very hard to get right, while it is easy to point out, but if you want my honest opinion, this is what I think. Also, the second victim who is watching her getting tortured does not look frightened enough; she looks more like she is studying what is going on, with a focused, slightly worried look. I think it would be better if she looked terrified, panicked, anxious, something like that. Make us feel that she is scared to be in that position, at these girls' mercy, probably next in line. Or better: that she has a connection with that girl, being her sister, lover, whatever. The point is that her eyes, her expression would make us feel that she's afraid to be next, or that she is sorry to see that girl suffer. Right now, she just looks focused.

Oh, and about the pile of clothes... This is not a criticism but rather a suggestion for the next one. I think it is hotter to catch sight of a pair of sandals or flip-flops on the floor, but that one is really your call 😀

 

[tk5454]

YO! Sorry for my late reply, I do appreciate the comments and I meant to respond, but I ended up with some nasty flu over the weekend. Feeling much better now, but still not quite 100%. Not thrilled that it is Monday already haha!

great work !!!

Thank you!!

Never saw the original but this looks great!

Thank you! I'm sorry for my confusion in the initial post... this isn't a remake or anything. I was referring to my previous pieces before. I'm still experimenting and trying new things, so all of those "corrections" were based on feedback from my other pieces up here. Thanks for commenting!

Great scenario and action! The discarded clothing and shoes is always a nice touch.

Jim
MTJpub.com

Thank you, Sir! It means a great deal coming from you.

Good work.

Thanks!

Looks great to me. Well done!

I appreciate it! There is lots of improvements to be made, but I'm happy with how this one turned out.

Very very nice.

Thanks for sharing
R

I'm glad you liked it!

I haven't seen your original version, but this one is brilliant! 🙂

My bad, I was not very clear in my initial post. I meant that the "fixes" were in regards to my other posts. I'm very much trying to improve... slow and steady, I suppose. Thank you very much for the compliment, though!

nice work

Thanks!

Really amazing improvements! I absolutely love the way the rope is pressing against the skin, making it "bulge" (for lack of a better word). It is actually very hard to make it look convincing without generating a "Michelin" effect, yet you did so masterfully! The victim's desperation looks absolutely pitch-perfect: I can almost hear her scream! And the two torturers are very cute; you seem to have put a lot of thought into their clothing and style, giving each her own identity while making them a good match. The victim's nipples are also perfect. Finally, I will join into Jim's praise for the way you drew the pile of clothes lying around. From my experience, it is actually quite hard to come up with a "random effect" while drawing, because artists never draw anything without a purpose. However in this case, you did it really well: they do look convincingly like they have been thrown around casually: another perfect score

I have really only one very minor criticism, and it is very subjective: I think once again that you need to polish the expressions. Firstly, the torturer whose eyes are visible still looks a bit like a doll rather than a human (that spark of life I mentioned before). I know it is very hard to get right, while it is easy to point out, but if you want my honest opinion, this is what I think. Also, the second victim who is watching her getting tortured does not look frightened enough; she looks more like she is studying what is going on, with a focused, slightly worried look. I think it would be better if she looked terrified, panicked, anxious, something like that. Make us feel that she is scared to be in that position, at these girls' mercy, probably next in line. Or better: that she has a connection with that girl, being her sister, lover, whatever. The point is that her eyes, her expression would make us feel that she's afraid to be next, or that she is sorry to see that girl suffer. Right now, she just looks focused.

Oh, and about the pile of clothes... This is not a criticism but rather a suggestion for the next one. I think it is hotter to catch sight of a pair of sandals or flip-flops on the floor, but that one is really your call 😀

Thank you, Sir! I feel like if I ever see you in the real world I would like to buy you a drink! I certainly do appreciate the honest feedback, and it is very well received. I will specifically target this for my next piece, so hopefully I can get closer to locking it down. I've tried different things with their eyes, but that might not be enough. Let me see what I can come up with and you let me know if it is moving in the right direction! Also, I've been looking at different anime pictures on a little known site known as "twitter". It helps to see what other people do to obtain that "spark".

Thanks also for the compliments! I'm glad you see an improvement, sometimes I'm not sure if I'm taking steps in the wrong direction. This isn't my main gig (I'm a guitarist, through and through), so I'm a bit "green".

I also agree with you on the clothes. I know I went a little overboard, I just have so much fun with the sketch part! I did regret that decision when it came to lineart and shading, however 😉. As always, I appreciate your thoughtful feedback and will certainly attempt to apply it. Thank you very much! 🙂

 

[Tenebrae]

You are welcome, sir! It is very kind of you I would certainly reciprocate! If you ever come down to Beijing, let me know: I'll buy you a round of beer, and not the local ones ^_^ Honestly, my brother is an artist, and he had much more trouble learning how to draw feet than he had to draw eyes. So since your girls' feet are perfect, you should master their expressions in no time!

By the way, you may well be a "guitarist through and through", but you are already a full-fledged artist, I can tell you that much! It is entirely possible to master several arts at the same time by the way: I know a few examples both here on the TMF and IRL.

Lol "a little know site known as Twitter" Well actually, I shouldn't laugh: here in China it is little known because we can't access it, hehe 😀

I can tell that you are absolutely in the right direction! So much so in fact that I cannot wait to see more of your drawings. Like Witchers say (yes, I am a hopeless gamer): "Good luck on the Path!"

 

[csonka]

Nice work

 

[hlkkln]

LOOK I LEARNED HOW TO MULTIQUOTE!!!! Muahahahaa!!



Yo! Actually, her arms and wrists are tied beneath the table and there's ropes pulling down between her ankles, but they are hard to see. Thanks for the feedback! I'll be sure to make that part more prominent next time. Actually, on my next one there should be no question how tied she is! *evil laugh*

Fization of the feet is not problem since the tickler sit on knee; but the fixation of the upperbody is unseen... OK her hand are tied to each other but it is not seen what restrict her to come to sitting position... a victim who suffers would make all moves that she can, eventough it will not help to reduce tickling 🙂

and ı should add that your ropes are too thin... I think they should be a bit ticker (not so much) because thin ropes or restraint hurts the ticklee... If I tickle torture a nice girl; I would like to be sure that the only distress suffered by the victim is the one that I perform 🙂 If the victims body is harmed or wounded by the ropes how she can be concentrated on the tickling torture?

 

[Darth Godflesh]

The remastered version is amazing