Got the PM, Laughingboy. Your storytelling is still quite good. It's just that the story is deveoping in a way that's a bit too hardcore for me. I don't care much for genital tickling or heavy-duty humiliation. The scenario, on the other hand, is quite creative. You have a real gift for dialogue. The character's speech has the flow of real human speech, quite natural and believable. That's not easy to do. And I think you have the basis for a genuine classic character in that stinker, Slick! I also thought that business with the Michael Jackson chimp was hilarious!
I'll be sure to view and comment on part three when you present it. Just bear in mind, it probably won't my cup of tea. That doesn't mean others won't enjoy it completely, though. You got 245 hits. That's not bad. A lot of people took a look. Remember, not even enthusiasts respond all the time.