Loads of girls/one girl

[aphrael2]

Hi! This is my first one, any and all feedback would be greatly appreciated. Please be honest ^_^
If you like it I'll do more.
xxx

 

[DEV]

Really good first pic. Girls are well done and the anatomy is spot on. One or two things to improve on cleaning it up a little, can still see a few sketch lines here and there. Other than that, a terrific start.

 

[aphrael2]

Yeah, I thought I should probs photoshop it a bit and colour it in...maybe?
Thanks for your comments though ^_^ really nice.

 

[TickleFur]

Very nice! Group body-tickles are the best. All the girls need is to be naked, and maybe more sexual

 

[jkb]

I rarely comment in the artwork forum, but this is fantastic for a first picture. As was mentioned before, clean it up, add color, and keep on working and improving.

 

[milagros317]

Very nice drawing, thanks for sharing it with us. 😀

 

[-Hari-]

thats cute man, Really nice work 🙂

 

[Deleted member 66627]

Great work! Rly. ^^

 

[Marquis De Sade]

Wow man. That's awesome. Self-taught?

 

[10 armed tkler]

If this is your first artwork, I can not wait for your improved work. Very good first one. You have a fan in me

 

[mirthgoblin]

Greetings, aphrael2. I usually don’t post criticism, but seeing as how you’ve asked for honesty, I’ll give you my fullest opinion.

What you’re doing right: The faces and expressions are amazing. Very cute, very vibrant. The ticklee has a laughing expression, which I always like, but you can still see she’s at her ticklish limit. The expressions on the ticklers’ faces show that they really, really enjoy what their doing, and if I’m not mistaken, the ticklee’s bra shows she’s also enjoying the tickling. The torso proportions, aka, the breasts, stomach, hips, and thighs, are all very well done.

What you’re doing wrong: First and foremost, the ticklee’s arms look a bit noodlesque, even for an anime character. Too long, and too bendy. Also, the sheer mass of girls in this image detracts from the actual tickling. I’d say, even for a mass tickle picture, you’ve got two too many girls here. The dark haired girl in the middle could definitely be removed to provide more space, as well as the only girl who is tickling the ticklee from the front. The hands and feet in this drawing could use a little work, though those are usually the hardest part of any image.

What I’d like to see: Keep in mind, what follows are not general ideas, but rather my own personal preferences. Take them with a grain of salt. I’d actually like to see more sole shots, seeing the bare sole of the foot being tickled. The bondage we see, the metal straps, seems a little more painful than restraining, so I’d really like to see more comfortable bondage, like padded cuffs or soft rope.

Now, all that being said, this is definitely an amazing first picture! I am truly impressed by your artistic ability, and already love your style. I can’t wait to see what you come up with next. Well done!

 

[JFA]

I really like this. Thanks for sharing.

R

 

[Oni Dorei]

This is a fantastic drawing. You really did a great job with this.

 

[Aragorn]

As a first post, I say: wow!

I really like it, nice work 🙂

And I think you guessed already that lots of people here want to see more of your work! 😀

 

[MeleeDuck_9]

Very nice.The slightly perky nips are a great touch. I think we can all agree that the tickling world would benefit from more massive all-girl gang ticklings.

 

[3xPIN]

Absolutely adorable.

 

[The Bandito]

This really is damn good.

Would love to see more from you.

If you're really looking for technical feedback - my personal opinion is that you could get the same level of hotness with a few less faces in the room. Might make it less busy, and a bit more focused on the Lee.

But you got the vibe perfectly. You obviously have a lot of skillz, and I think your work is top notch.

Would love to see more from you.

Please keep it up.

YAY!

B