Opinions please

[texastickler]

This is a new poem. Please lend me your thoughts. Please be honest.

Thanks in advance,

Tom

THE ENDING

It doesn’t matter
That’s what they say
They brandish their weapon
As they enter the fray.

Death and darkness
Mean nothing to them
They kill without conscience
A soul to condemn!

Why so much hatred?
Why so much lust?
For all things are equal
And love is a must

People are dying
No help can be found
No hand to reach out for
Not one soul around.

Is this what it means?
Is this how life goes?
No friends to be heard of
Only blood lust and foes?

Come back to me friend
I need your heart with me
Pull me out of this hole
This to you is my plea!

My soul is diminished
I can feel deaths firm grip
My eyes grow dim and dark
I am sailing the last ship

Please let there be gardens
Green pastures and light
No more struggles for me
Let my friends be my might.

 

[Babbles]

This is excellent, well wrought, but somewhat dark, almost what one might think a soldier in the middle of battle might be thinking?
Or is that the analogy you're using, is there another scenario you're thinking of? If you want to reveal it, unless you want to accumulate responses before commenting? 🙂

 

[texastickler]

This is excellent, well wrought, but somewhat dark, almost what one might think a soldier in the middle of battle might be thinking?
Or is that the analogy you're using, is there another scenario you're thinking of? If you want to reveal it, unless you want to accumulate responses before commenting? 🙂

That is a very good look at this poem. I always like people to decide for themselves what the poem is saying so I will not reveal the thoughts behind it. Great work. I always love to hear what others think.

Tom

 

[TklDuo-Ann]

I like it, Tom. To me, it sounds like the overall struggles with life (which can be a battle at times) and the recognition that friends are often the ones who stand by us and help us through. We're sometimes stuck in the midst of what life throws at us. But, if we can see/hope for that light that will come, it's easier to get through.

 

[texastickler]

I like it, Tom. To me, it sounds like the overall struggles with life (which can be a battle at times) and the recognition that friends are often the ones who stand by us and help us through. We're sometimes stuck in the midst of what life throws at us. But, if we can see/hope for that light that will come, it's easier to get through.

Thanks Ann. I do appreciate your thoughts on the poem. It is an interestig one to be sure. I wrote this mighty fast but when I am in a mood I have to write. I like your Analyzation as well.

 

[BellybTickler]

🙂.

 

[texastickler]

🙂.

Silence is worth a thousand words! 😀 Thanks man!