Secret Military Experiment

[Kjiron]

Wow
Given that the pubic area is exposed and tickled, I'm a little surprised that the breasts aren't too.

I think those are bellybuttons actually. Outstanding none-the-less. You are quite tallented to say the least. Thanks for sharing your gift with the community.

 

[Sablesword]

I think those are bellybuttons actually.

<checks artwork at full screen-size>

Yes, you're right. My mistake. And that makes much more sense.

So let me withdraw the criticism and add another "Wow!"

They're great drawings. And BIG - well worth downloading to look at at full-screen. Lots of wonderful detail.

 

[TickleMantis]

Brilliant! 😀

...Any chance you'll be doing a comic?

 

[scavenger]

Awesome story, Sablesword! Of course you may associate your story to my drawing, I think it's very well written, and the lenght of the intro is just perfect. I really like the dark mood of it, just as I envisioned it while drawing.

I can't wait for the next part 🙂

 

[Sablesword]

Awesome story, Sablesword! Of course you may associate your story to my drawing, I think it's very well written, and the lenght of the intro is just perfect. I really like the dark mood of it, just as I envisioned it while drawing.

I can't wait for the next part 🙂

OK, I'm planning to post the story over in the story forum when I get it finished, but I'll put a pointer in this thread.

Right now I'm having trouble with too many point-of-view shifts and with coming up with a good ending. But here's the next bit:

***
Sergeant Kathy Smith went through the airlock first. By the time she had taken three steps past the hatch, she realized that she was now on board a squidcat ship. "Great," she muttered under her breath, keeping a wary eye on the manipulator unit that hung inert from the ceiling in front of her. She took a fourth step and the tee-pod hit her, squelching against her back. On contact with her skin, the basketball-sized alien creature unraveled, wrapping ribbon-like tendrils around her body. It pinned her arms to her side, and held her legs together, with more and more tendrils winding around her until she was encased like a mummy. Only her head, her bare feet, and the skin around her navel were left exposed.

Kathy tottered, but before she could fall, the manipulator whirred to life. Its grabbers seized her and it carried her off, following the track set in the ceiling. As it left, another manipulator moved into position.

Half a minute later, Emily emerged from the airlock. She knew what to expect in general, but not in specific: When she had 'volunteered' for the project she had been cut off from the planning sessions. So when she stepped forward, looking around nervously for the tee-pod projector that she knew was there, she didn't see it until too late. In moments the second tee-pod had Emily wrapped up, and the second manipulator was carrying her away.

Emily also knew just what a tee-pod was: A psi-active alien creature, first discovered by the leotaurs and then genetically engineered by the kraken for the purpose of restraining and subduing human and humanoid prisoners. The first function was accomplished by the ribbon-tendrils that were now tightly wrapped around her body, and the second function was accomplished by tickling.

Already Emily could feel the tee-pods thicker tentacles wrapping around her toes and probing the soles of her feet. Another set of tentacles began to explore the exposed patch on her stomach. Emily began to giggle.
***
(to be continued...)

 

[a1532b]

Each drawing you do is a piece of artwork! I almost feel as this doesn't deserve to be here, but instead on someone's wall!

 

[Slayerfan13x]

Nicely done dude

 

[scavenger]

Again, another fine piece of literature, Sablesword!
"Tee-pod" I like the name. It's origins correspond to my idea too. Though it's form I envisioned differently. More like a flexible, hollow, tube like creature, with tentacled openings at both ends and one in the center. The inside would be covered by small suction cups, used by the creature to cling to it's victim's skin (and for some extra stimulating sensations 😉 ).
It would lay coiled up to a ball when idle and would grab it's victim quite like you described it. In short, it'd be some kind of living cocoon.

Then again, I must say I like your description (with the ribbon tentacles), so I wouldn't mind you having it your way. 🙂

And also, I personally like the point of view style, where you can switch between the characters. just like in some movies.

Again, exellent writing, and I'm looking forward to the rest of the story!

 

[Sablesword]

OK, I've posted Part 1 of "A Secret Military Experiment" over in the story forum. Part 2 will go up after I get it finished. Right now my motivation/inspiration is flagging a bit, so bugging me about it a little would actually be a good thing.

As for point-of-view shifts - they're not *bad,* but you have to do them right. In particular you have to avoid doing them too fast, or without signaling the reader that the pov has shifted.

It's a little bit like perspective and proportion in drawings - if you mess it up, the work comes out odd-looking and not so good.

 

[FT Tklr]

Great Stuff! I also love the mummy ticking. Keep up the good work

 

[rajee]

Very Creative. Awesome! 😀

 

[Darth Vegeta]

Excellent!

 

[Sablesword]

The conclusion of the story "A Secret Military Experiment" is now posted over in the story forum.

 

[Kalamos]

Reviving another older thread.

Thumbs up.