Tickle Tourture (adult & bdsm content)

[hazelf]

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[johntfs]

In terms of content, that was probably a really hot, interesting story. I say probably because the format makes it extremely difficult to read. So I didn't read it. There were obvious spelling and grammar errors that tend to make my teeth ache, even beyond the problem of having everything clumped together into large blocks of text. Here's the thing, if you're going to spend a few hours or more writing a story, spend a few minutes (at least) proof-reading it and putting into an easily readable form.

 

[ShadowTklr]

I agree with jontfs about the format, but in terms of content, I'm having a difficult time understanding how this is "Tickle Torture." Definitely BDSM, but tickle torture?

Anyway, nice effort. Your passion is apparent in the text. 🙂

 

[love feet]

very nice!

 

[suikoden]

I agree with Jon and Shadow. You've obviously put a lot of work into this story and some formatting with paragraphs and speech breaks would have made it a lot easier to read.

Not sure if you edit on Word or another package but there some decent checking functions on there.

Keep going!

 

[bengali tickler]

worth reading despite numerous typo error, anyways keep it up